A flash sparked across the sky, the Perseids were an interactive canvas for her special night. Jess felt the closeness of Jake, could feel his breath tickle the hairs on her neck, and she held her breath, savoring the moment. Any second now, here in the backyard under the stars, Jake would be her first kiss! How romantic!
He leaned in and she felt tingly with excitement. He reached over and suddenly his hands were in her shirt. Another reached down there, a special secret place. She froze. Is this how it goes instead? Will the kiss ever come? In her mind it was as if she locked the door and threw away the key, this never ending moment a secret, a dark place to never visit again. She closed her eyes and did her best not to think or feel.
Wow...in so few words, so much emotion. I could see this scene and want to read more.
ReplyDeleteWhat a dickhead. Man did you do a great job of getting the emotions going with so few words!
ReplyDeleteWell written piece - though I really want to throttle that man! Very good use of the prompts!
ReplyDeleteWhat a great portrayal of magic gone wrong, the swift disappointment, then violation. Wonderful piece!
ReplyDeleteOh, no! I want to come to her protection...
ReplyDeleteThat awkward first time, who knows what we are supposed to do or how to do it.
ReplyDeleteThis is a great turn of phrase: "an interactive canvas for her special night." It's just so awful that Jess's special night turned out not to be what she hoped for. You've captured so much in so few words!
ReplyDeleteUgh, I feel bad for her. I wanted her to have a lovely first little kiss.
ReplyDeleteHow disappointed she much be... Great post.
ReplyDeleteOh, man -- I really want to protect her...
ReplyDeleteI tensed up just reading this. Well done.
ReplyDeleteOh, I feel so bad for her. that innocence and sweetness of young romance tarnished by Jake's thoughtless, horrible behavior.
ReplyDeleteThose days of innocence feel like a lifetime ago . . . I feel for Jess and want to hit Jake!
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