"It wasn't supposed to end like this. It wasn't supposed to even begin, you know. You're better off now" I told myself but the tears kept coming. I walked away, leaving my phone to fend for itself, leaving the last bit of you, of us, out in the cold. "I deserve a gold star, good karma, a million dollars for putting up with your emotionally wretched shit" I screeched, as if you could hear. As if saying that made it all better. Why was I still bawling my eyes out? I got rid of you for a reason so why did it still hurt?
a fiction piece for the Speakeasy at Yeahwrite
I've done that and then realized the phone was still on. Oops.
ReplyDeleteI deserve a gold star, too. I love that line!
ReplyDeleteOohhh...I'm so curious! I wonder what "emotionally wretched shit" happened between them? Love that phrase!
ReplyDeleteWow, this makes me want to know more! I have wanted to scream that at the phone a time or two as well...
ReplyDeleteLove this! What a great job capturing the emotion a relationship's end. I love "emotionally wretched shit" - so perfect.
ReplyDeleteUm, that should read of a relationship's end. Typing too fast.
DeleteI love how you conveyed so much in so few words. And the reenactment (hopefully) photo with your blackberry is awesome!
ReplyDeleteYou captured so much emotion in such a short piece . . . I particularly love this - "The dull whir of the ended call echoed into my mind like a drill. Mocking me."
ReplyDeletePowerfully brief. I liked it.
ReplyDeleteGood job. You so effectively conveyed those feelings of hurt and rage in such a concise way.
ReplyDeleteBeen her ebefore. Phones and exes do not mix well.
ReplyDeleteack, i totally felt the emotion, the pain.
ReplyDeleteA post everyone can relate to! Well done.
ReplyDeleteSo much said. Good tight writing which I like.
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